Musical Dip

Victoria has set the prompt at dverse pub poets today.
It is a Quatrian Refrain comprising eight lines:
two tercets and a couplet,
eight syllables per line or iambic tetrameter, your choice,
first line is a refrain, repeated as the last (some variation acceptable).


Musical Dip

It was indeed a fated trip.
She wanted music endlessly.
It pays to listen properly.

The cruise was meant to mend her hip.
‘Over here’, I cried, self-satisfied,
and whooping loud, ‘A band on ship’.

She jumped, feet-first, straight in the sea.
I won’t forget that fated trip.

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31 Responses to Musical Dip

  1. Fun take on the prompt and well-written. Not sure that cruise was very therapeutic for her, though.

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  2. Bodhirose says:

    Oh man, that was a fated trip but it made for a really fun poem! 🙂

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  3. Waltermarks says:

    Okay Shirley. It took me a minute to catch your quip. Nothing like yelling a band on ship, very good!

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  4. Grace says:

    That would be indeed a memorable trip ~ Love the cadence of the middle stanza with hip/ship ~

    Thanks for joining us and Happy Easter !!!

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  5. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    Such an exquisite play on form so well executed!

    Lots of love,

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  6. Kathy Reed says:

    Fun to read and nicely done..really, not to be trite;)

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  7. felicity says:

    I love this.


  8. Captured the form with lots of fun and play on words. Enjoyed this a lot! Well writ.

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  9. Mary says:

    Well, it definitely seems like the cruise was ILL-fated!

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  10. lynn__ says:

    Funny…but ouch that had to hurt!

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  11. Those bands have a way of ruining a good trip! Made me smile, Shirley!


  12. ShirleyB says:

    🙂 Thank you, Walt


  13. Anonymous says:

    Loved the play on words…”a band on ship” indeed. Perfect use of rhyme, meter and format. Nicely done.

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  14. whimsygizmo says:

    Ha! Too much fun!

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  15. Hilarious. D)
    I like how the title rhymed with the refrain line as well.

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  16. Bryan Ens says:

    A band on ship. Love the play on words!


  17. Band
    trip would
    fare the weLLer
    than a Band on
    Ship.. for sure..;)


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